Your younger brother Karim is moving to Canada in March to join you. He will stay in your home at first while he looks for work. He has asked you what he should bring and how he can prepare before he arrives.
Write an email to your younger brother, Karim in about 150–200 words. Your email should do the following things:
- Tell him what to pack for the weather in March.
- Give him advice about preparing to look for work.
- Describe your plan for helping him during his first weeks.
Sample answer at Level 5 (CLB 5, acquiring)
137 wordsHi Karim,
How are you? I am so happy you coming to Canada in March!!
In March here is still winter, very cold and sometime is snow, you need bring warm jacket and boots, gloves also.Dont bring many summer clothes is no need. About job, you must to make the resume before, here resume is different like our country. And practise english every day, without english nobody give you job.
When you come I take you from airport and you stay in my house, no problem, my kids they are very excited for see uncle. We go together for find the job. Dont worry for nothing. Also bring for me the spices from mom and the black tea, here is very expensive.
See you soon brother I miss you too much. Mom say hello for you.
Samira
Why this is Level 5
- All three points are touched and the friendly tone fits a brother, but each gets one or two sentences, and the plan for his first weeks is only "We go together for find the job".
- Frequent errors in simple sentences: missing verbs and subjects ("you coming", "is no need", "here is very expensive"), "must to make", "different like our country" and a double negative ("Dont worry for nothing").
- Packing and job advice share one paragraph, a period has no space after it ("gloves also.Dont"), and "english" has no capital letter.
- The ending drifts off the task: the request for spices and black tea has nothing to do with preparing for the move.
To reach Level 6
- Give each bullet its own paragraph and one useful detail: the March temperature, what a Canadian resume leaves out, what you will do in his first week.
- Fix the patterns that repeat: "you are coming", "it is", "you must make", and a capital letter for "English".
Sample answer at Level 7 (CLB 7, adequate)
154 wordsDear Karim,
I am writing to answer your questions about coming to Canada. I am very happy that you will come in March, the kids are asking every day when is uncle coming.
About the clothes, in March in Ottawa is still winter, sometimes is minus 10 and there is snow everywhere. You should bring warm jacket, boots, gloves and hat. But don't buy expensive coat there, here you can find more cheap.
For the job, you need to change your resume for Canadian style because here is different. Also you should to practise your English, especially the speaking because the interview is very important for find a good job.
When you arrive I will pick up you from airport and you can stay in our home how long you need. After I will help you to search the jobs and we will go together to the bank and other places.
Best regards,
Samira
Why this is Level 7
- One paragraph per bullet, in order, with some useful detail: minus 10 and snow, a Canadian-style resume, speaking practice for interviews.
- Errors in most sentences: question word order ("when is uncle coming"), missing subjects ("in March in Ottawa is still winter"), "more cheap", "you should to practise", "pick up you" and "how long you need".
- The tone is too stiff for a brother: "I am writing to answer your questions" and "Best regards" sound like a business email.
- The plan for his first weeks stays vague ("the bank and other places"), and the job advice doesn't say what is different about a Canadian resume.
To reach Level 8
- Open and close the way you would with family ("Hi Karim," and "See you soon,") and drop the business purpose sentence.
- Make the last paragraph a real plan: the day you pick him up, what you will set up in the first week, how you will help with the job search.
Sample answer at Level 9 (CLB 9, effective)
177 wordsHi Karim,
I'm so happy you are finally coming! The kids are already counting the days until uncle Karim arrive.
You asked what to pack. March in Ottawa is still winter, it can be minus 15 in the morning and there is a lot of snow. Bring warm clothes like sweaters, a hat, gloves and warm socks. Don't buy a heavy coat or winter boots at home, we can buy them here, they are cheaper at the end of the season and better for this weather.
For the job search, the most important thing is to change your resume to the Canadian style. Here people don't put a photo or their age on the resume. It's also a good idea to bring some reference letters from your old jobs because employers here like references.
When you arrive you will stay with us as long as you need. In the first week we will go to open a bank account and get your SIN, after that I will help you to look for jobs.
See you soon!
Samira
Why this is Level 9
- All three points are covered in separate paragraphs with practical detail: minus 15 and snow, buying the coat and boots in Canada, no photo or age on the resume, reference letters, a bank account and a SIN.
- The tone is warm and natural for a brother, with a friendly opening and close.
- Errors are occasional and never block meaning: "until uncle Karim arrive", "help you to look" and comma splices ("still winter, it can be", "buy them here, they are cheaper", "get your SIN, after that").
- What keeps it at 9: "warm" and "resume" repeat, the plan for the first weeks is brief, and the transitions are basic.
To reach Level 10
- Fix the comma splices with a period or a linking word: "Don't buy a heavy coat at home, because it's cheaper here at the end of the season."
- Add one detail to the plan: the day you'll pick him up, or how you'll help with his first applications.
Sample answer at Level 11 (CLB 11, advanced)
179 wordsHi Karim,
Only seven weeks to go! The kids made a countdown calendar and they cross off a day every morning.
You asked about packing, so here's the honest answer: March in Ottawa is still winter, just a messier one. Some mornings are minus 12 and by lunch you're walking through wet snow. Bring layers instead of big bulky things, a couple of warm sweaters, a warm hat and gloves. Leave the coat and boots for now, I'll take you shopping once the sales start.
About the job, the most useful thing you can do before you leave is to update your resume for Canadian employers. That means no photo or date of birth, and a few lines under each job that shows what you achieved. Its also worth to ask your manager for a reference letter while you're still there.
For the first weeks the spare room is yours for as long as you need it. I took the day you arrive off, and that week we'll open a bank account and apply for your SIN.
Hugs,
Samira
Why this is Level 11
- A lively, natural opening ("Only seven weeks to go!") and a tone that is exactly right for a brother.
- Specific, practical advice: layers instead of bulky things, a coat and boots bought in the sales, no photo or date of birth on the resume, a reference letter from his manager.
- Varied structures used with control: a colon to introduce the answer, "once the sales start", "while you're still there", "for as long as you need it".
- What keeps it below 12: small slips ("each job that shows", "Its also worth to ask", "I took the day you arrive off", commas where a colon or a period belongs), and the job advice doesn't say what kind of work he is looking for.
To reach Level 12
- Fix the small slips: "a few lines under each job that show what you achieved", "It's also worth asking", "I've taken the day you arrive off".
- Add one detail to the job advice, such as where to look for openings, so it is as specific as the packing paragraph.